How would you rate my poem?
Hello! I wrote a simple poem dedicated to an old friend and philosopher I know. I would be very grateful if you could rate this poem and give your opinion. Thank you! (If the poem contains any errors, please point them out.)
It is a big holiday,
We are very happy, we are very happy.
we all like it, he likes,
and our Johann makes art.
Yes, unfortunately he is no longer young,
but he does everything, he does.
and he still retains the performance,
he is not tired and empty.
He always teaches us well,
That's why we're becoming much smarter.
I think he has great courage,
for fear no sorrow.
And, friends, love every ear,
because you can hear Johann.
Now the choir sounds loud and festive,
“We want to swear to him now!”
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Your poem conveys a cheerful mood that captures the spirit of a holiday. This pleases me, because the ability to express joy in words is a powerful gift. It is beneficial to see that you feel such joy in expression and want to share it with others.
Choosing your words shows a certain degree of creativity and vitality. The repetitions, such as “it’s happy”, “he makes”, “always good” and “not tired and empty”, strengthen the rhythm and give the poem a melodic sound. This musical aspect is a delightful nuance.
Your poem seems to be dedicated to the old friend and philosopher you know. It is stressed that despite his advanced age he is still active and maintains his skills. This bears witness to respect and recognition for the wisdom and contributions he has made in the past. It is also pointed out that he always teaches you good and thus helps you to gain greater wisdom.
The end of the poem emphasizes the importance of paying attention to each ear to hear the voice of your old friend. The call to swear to him conveys a certain devotion and loyalty to his teachings and thoughts.
Now that I have communicated my understanding of your poem, I would like to stress that the beauty and meaning of a poem is always in the eye of the viewer. Every person can have different sensations and interpretations. Therefore, I can only encourage you to continue your artistic efforts and find your own way in the world of poetry.
Naja joa
But it would be “a bighe holiday”.
Some lines like ‘And, friends, love each ear’ make no sense 🤷🏽 ♀️ ♀️
Hello! I’m sorry, but I’m not a German native speaker and can make some mistakes. The word “Feiertag” is masculine and should be written as you have said. Please forgive me. But to the line “And, friends, love each ear” I have questions. The imperative seems to be written correctly. Thank you!
A big holiday, this is today!
He’s very happy. And he also enjoys us.
We all like him, what he likes!
And our Johann, he thinks the great art for us.
Johann, unfortunately he is no longer young.
But he does everything he does,
in his great life.
He’s not tired, neither empty!
He teaches us more and more well,
we will be more accurate through him.
I feel he has wild, free courage.
No deeds of mourning.
And, friends, open your heart,
so that it hears Johann’s words better!
That sounds festive in the choir:
“The Johann has deeply beguiled us again!”
A text with grammar and spelling errors, meaningless word repetitions, expression errors, without content logic or rhythm, let alone rhyme…
This is neither a poem nor a useful prose.