What do you think of my writing style?
Hello.
I'm currently busy writing a book.
Here is a small excerpt from my book:
"Anton lay lost in thought in his prison cell. It was evening, and the sun was already halfway below the horizon. He glanced through the barred window. The first stars were already appearing in the sky, and the sky was turning a pleasant purple. Although the last warm rays of sunlight shone soothingly through the bars onto his abdomen, he simply couldn't find peace. He was filled with excitement for the next day—the day he would finally be released into freedom. For almost two years, he had to endure this 8-square-meter solitary cell, but now the long-awaited end of his sentence was approaching."
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Hello!
I think your style of writing is all right. So you can definitely understand and follow the text section. However, I do not see any speciality in your style.
I need to know how long you’ve been writing? So texts, spa stories, poems etc.
Until a real style of writing develops, which is quite individual, it can take several years. This is why my curiosity
Don’t sound bad.
I’ve been writing for about half a year.
All right, then it’s completely normal that you haven’t found your individual writing style yet. What’s helping is just keep going. At some point, you can see how it develops. In particular, when comparing old texts with new ones,
Have fun!
The text is full of contradictions.
If the sun isn’t completely sunk, you don’t see stars yet.
I think he’s in bed? Then how can the deep sun shine down to the bed through the high above window? This is not technically possible.
I like your text from the word choice and from the sentence building. You still have some weaknesses.
In fact, it is sometimes possible that the first stars appear at the companyment, although the sun has not yet completely fallen. If it’s dark enough, you can see stars.
The last sun rays can penetrate to it, through reflections or if there is a free and straight surface between the sun and the window. A meadow for example.
That would be the only place I would formulate differently. Otherwise it sounds good.
I just don’t find a suitable formulation. I’m sorry.
Perhaps something like “Although the last sun rays through the bars on his abdomen left a pleasant warmth […]”
Sounds good:)
That doesn’t sound bad either. But I changed it again. Look at my question again.
You’re doing fine.
Your spelling is not good, some mistakes
Which one?
For example:
It was evening, and the
No comma is set before a “and” (= connect word).
good