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Your English is by far not good enough to write in English. You seem to choose the simplest words.

In addition, the behavior of the characters makes no sense. Why is the princess suddenly yelling at her father before strangers? And the father screams back? These are not children but adult people. She could have made a snippy comment on the topic of wedding or could tell him that she still doesn’t want to. It has immediately broken out into emotions directly and completely incomprehensible. In probably quite strong, that by your man’s money chime English vocabulary flat over. Emotions are built before they break out.

You shorten things that could be exciting. Within few sentences, the princess runs away and changes her name. Quite large parts of your story seem like a summary of irrelevant events. Because you’re just writing what’s happening instead of pointing it.

Very much more have not read, it is not very exciting written (the plot not the problem). I would still say that dialogue is not consistent. The noble figures talk to you as if they were farmers. I would expect them to put up an elevated language at least among themselves. At least a professional.