Wie findet ihr diese lustige Geschichte für Kinder? 😁?

No big story, though the subject is very stupid in my eyes. But I have to let the “Moral” be a good one…

Nevertheless, I found some grammatical and contentious shortcomings:

In fact, at this moment a man entered the quiet place – we call him Mr Müller.

Why do we call him? You’re the author. You decide what your characters are called. This not concrete has lost nothing in a written history. Does he mean Mr Müller or not?

At the moment when Mr. Müller grabbed Rolly to tear a piece of toilet paper, the inconceivable happened: Rolly had to surrender himself to fear and disgust. A small fountain of white, semi-liquid paper pulp shot out of the roll and hit Mr. Müller in the middle of his face.

I know better when Rolly “takes out” and hops through the “still place” than that with the…

“That was the most fun thing I’ve ever seen! A toilet paper roll that gives up, it’s not! I will keep this moment forever in my memory.”

There are also no talking hygiene articles;) In addition, this section is formulated to “high night”. It does not fit into the style – as it is fomuliert.

A few days had passed since Rolly, the anxious toilet paper roll, handed over to Ekel and had hit poor Mr. Müller in the face with a paper chip.

There was two times: a few days had passed since Rolly, the anxious toilet paper roll, handed over to ecle had (that’s too much – sit there after “a comma…) and the poor Mr. Müller had hit his face with a paper-brow font.