Wie findet ihr das Gedicht?
ich hab das Gedicht geschrieben als es mir nicht so gut ging. Wie findet ihr das und habt ihr Verbesserungsvorschläge? Idk es würde mich auch voll interessieren wie jmd das analysieren würde also wenn jmd Lust hast go for it wenn nicht dann nicht. Ich bin außerdem in Therapie also alles gut.
Du kennst mich
Ich bin es wieder
Ein alter bekannter
Du kennst mich
Ich kenne dich
Ich bin eiskalt
Verluste sind mir egal
Du bist mir egal
Mir ist alles egal
Gehorche mir
Tu es
Schneide
Kratze
Verbrenne
Es ist mir egal
Solang du es tust
Jetzt
Sofort
Du hast keine Zeit mehr
Schneller
Tiefer
Länger
Bis dein t Shirt rot ist
Hellrot
Rot
Dunkelrot
Blutrot
Nochmal
Wiederholung
Endlose zeitschleife
Du denkst du bist fertig?
Nein
Du bist fertig wenn ich es dir sage
Wenn ich es dir erlaube
Aber im Endeffekt
Bin ich ein Teil von dir
Und ohne ich bist du nicht du
Und ohne du bin ich nicht ich
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In the third last line it must be:
And without mI, you are not you.
Otherwise well done, you should split it into verses.
The poem intensively describes the emotional world of a psychotic ritzer.
Show it to your therapist who then quickly recognizes what it looks like in you and can then put it in the right place.
The poem conveys intense feelings and a dark mood that may be related to inner conflict or pain. It uses strong images and repetitions to generate emotional intensity.
Improvement proposals:
• Clarity of the message: Consider whether you want to work out specific topics or feelings more clearly.
• Structure: Experiment with different dimensions or styles to vary rhythm and effect.
Yeah, actually, I’ve got stanzas, and that’s something you don’t see. So actually, paragraphs are between the verses. But thanks for the suggestions for improvement!! 🙂
I find it difficult to find beauty in something as unaesthetic as Borderline, especially when it romanticizes itself. I’m not a fan of Staccatos either. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N6aQA0QLHV0
People who said I had borderline?
I read that out.
Borderline is a generic term among which various symptoms can be summarized. Who doesn’t tick normally is at the edge of society – even if you may be integrated (what I wish you).
If you seem to know so much about the subject, you probably wouldn’t know that all borderline hurts yourself and not all those who hurt themselves borderline. So yes I think the article would bring you something.
Loulou, I’ve read dozens of books about psychology, and have a news score that keeps me on track when there are new studies on personality disorders — do you think your article can add a lot to that? Nothing bad.
Then read the article. There are facts
I’m completely left, not projecting.
digga calm down
That’s what you read about https://www.limes-schlosskliniken.de/blog/borderline-persoenlichkeitsstoerung/#:~:text=contrary%20manual%20ist%20self-absorbing,without%20a%20Borderline%2DPers%C3%B6nlichkeitsst%C3%B6rung%20.
Factically wrong? Sure. There might be a brothel that doesn’t. Then why he was then diagnosed as such? Magic.
I also don’t know if you’ve got it or not, because I’m strictly referring to the poem. That you go right here to the barricades is perhaps a point about which you can reflect, because what I’m talking about is not a threat—
Unless your self-image is based on foreign perception.
I’m actually just wrong, but okay. It is clear in my poem about self-infringement, but I did BIN in therapy and I made HABE diagnostics with my therapist and have KEIN borderlineline
I see this differently, only the form of self-infringement differs. some are crushing relationships, others are stunned with drugs, which also destroy the basis of existence (is accepted), others again eat full, are promiscuous (and afterwards full of self-hass, because self-image is shot) etc. and so on. What is common to all: lack of impulse control, and a huge “please hit me” shield on the forehead. Visually speaking. But yes, not every self-infringement must also indicate on Borderline, but your poem is somewhat too specific.
Yeah, but you should never put a remote diagnosis and just because it’s about self-infringement, it doesn’t mean I have borderline. Not all borderline injured themselves and not all those who have hurt themselves borderline
The definition of “compression” or “Lyrik” is not the aimless classification of word sleeves and phrases, as is the case in these lines.
lg up
The individual words have not come together without aim, they express feelings that you do not understand.
Yes. 😅
A Borderline version of “I am I”
Not my thing, sounds like a cry for help.
https://www.telefonseelsorge.de/
Yes I’m in therapy too, so I have everything right
I don’t like it. Sounds like SVV.
Is also the
What is SVV?
Self-absorbing behavior, scorching with razor blade.