This is part of the first chapter Abigail's POV: It was pretty late. I still was up because I couldn't sleep. For some reason, although I was sleepy all day, I was wide awake that night. I wasn't sure where that came from, although, I could imagine it was that little shadow-like figure that I…
I rewrote the prologue again. I would be happy to receive hard and good feedback again In the forty-fourth year of the Kingdom of Varial, a time when the shadows of the past still hung long over the land, King Mauro, the founder and sole ruler of this realm, sat on his throne with steely…
As before, I would appreciate some hard feedback. A short one will suffice. A girl, about 15 years old, became visible. She was his age, perhaps a year apart, but that didn't explain why she was hiding. Is she shy, Leonard wondered. She was beautiful. Her green hair, shimmering in the sunlight, seemed almost to…