Is this aphorism good?

I wrote an aphorism, it reads:

You live your life in the mass of the rabble in the shadow of the low-minded, until the inner volcano explodes and ash rains down on your head.

How would you rate this text?

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treppensteiger
1 year ago

I do not succeed in evaluating content, sober. But as a “image”, as an unsharp description of a state of feeling it sounds good and a bit right.

However, this becomes really useful only in a 10 to 20-page text that goes closer to the topic.