How do you like my Wattpad story?

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Feel free to write to me and tell me what I can improve.

https://www.wattpad.com/story/273299158?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=Nerdkidfreak007&w p_originator=u7b4blh2%2BnhGr1h0pS%2BRTbfPYWKGBT62B1Mhk%2BBHE2d1GSxJyhxMGxACE 4CRdOsLU1QzSUzjBXzIr2yxfD6pZg7gg%2Bl6GlQ%2Ftzk6dcej8ilsBAIrCiTpk6Kb8o8l%2FQl7

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TorDerSchatten
TorDerSchatten
2 years ago

Time is not always grammatically correct. The subject is brought to the hair.

  1. Why doesn’t she write letters to her friend Katharina in the neighboring village?
  2. Why does she write letters to the new friend Kia? By e-mail it would be much faster and from the content exchange it would be exactly the same

Please do not use lutched metaphors “like the sheds of the eyes” – what a bullshit.

And that the big brother immediately gives an earfeige – this is extremely over-plated

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Nerdkidfreak007
Nerdkidfreak007
1 year ago
Reply to  TorDerSchatten

Letters are more beautiful than mails

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sleepingbeautyy
sleepingbeautyy
2 years ago

Too many commas that makes reading difficult.

The flap text contains unnecessary information.

Why is everything written in the past, except for some sentences in the present?

Something boring but at least the story is something new.

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