Book description good?
Dark times reign in the kingdom of Ravania; good has been stolen from the people, and evil has seized power. Only one can oppose the dark forces, but she is imprisoned in a dungeon. Can she save her kingdom despite everything and bring good back to the people? (1)
Dark times reign in the kingdom of Ravania; evil has insidiously stolen the good. The rightful heir to the throne sits imprisoned in a dungeon after a hopeless battle. While her adversary, the Dark King and her power-hungry uncle Yisoksil, wreaks havoc among the kingdom's citizens. (2)
Does that sound good and would you want to read the book based on this description?
Ps: Which text is better?
(2 votes)
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1. There’s something like that, it doesn’t stand out. But if you’re interested in the subject, you’ll probably read it like that.
Two. Because basically both tears are good. Because both just betrayed enough to not betray too much and still make pleasure (more).
3. Nevertheless, you should rework both texts, or just the one you choose for. Some sentences sound a little bit thrive, other grammatically unhappy and then there are also some unsightly mistakes in it. Just in the short description you should avoid this.
“Good” and “Evil” are too generic to me. Nothing really interesting. Does the antagonist have legitimate reasons? Is the protagonist perhaps too right in the dungeon?
History is always written by the winners and whether I am a terrorist, or freedom fighters, depends on the view of the narrator. You can make a lot of it, but I don’t see it yet.
Yeah, it’s just because I’m talking about things that don’t tell you so much. Perhaps you could conceive something about evil and good (like, no idea, fairies against elves, just what these are for parties). In addition, I would also find the book cover important for my decision..
In itself, it’s not just something to mainstream. “Only one can oppose evil,” that has been used too often in other descriptions and would only be bored by readers.
Also more information is cool, she fights alone or does she have friends? What makes her so special? How did she get into her situation? Well, that’s what you’re supposed to say, but the details would take the story off the others.
There are too much fantasy novels from Teenies that all ashtrays have as basis.
I’m not a teen, nor is it an ashtray
Then write something adult and you don’t even have to think ass plasters. If you write it, you ask for field criticism.
Sure it goes deeper, but it’s always the same the right one is stuck the wrong one has the proverbial scepter in the hand.
I’m sorry, this goes to Trash long and cross-checked. Hold your tea.
I don’t know, sounds too vague. Perhaps more information about the main character, the circumstances or so.
You got me at “THEY is lost in the dungeon”. Not that the part before was kind of good.
Why?
Definitely text 2. You learn more who the girl is and what exactly she wants. Well written. I’d read it.
Sorry, but that sounds horrible. Aside from spelling and puncturing.
I don’t think it’s interesting at all.
…too many spelling and grammar errors. If they are already present in the book description, it will not be better in the book ^^’ If not meant evil, you simply have to practice
Very well written with good ideas and I personally find the second really better but I would also read it if the first text came