Am I a good poet?

Question

So, I'm really unsure if I'm any good. My friends said, "No words," in due enthusiasm. I asked them for three random words (because three were present) and wrote the poem in just under 15 minutes.

Words: dinosaurs, jeans, killing.

Yesterday dinosaurs, today crazy people.
Which often cross the boundaries.
They should be killed to be honest.
Then the world will be so beautiful and wonderful again.
Letting others work for little money.
The simple production of jeans, all over the world.
So many people are forced to labor.
But nobody knows the whole truth.
How they are excreted.
Humanity is supposed to just die out.

Here's another one, with a duration of 11 minutes.

Words: Willow Project, teddy bear, glue

Every child once had a teddy bear to sleep with.
Your best friend got punished by mommy.
You were literally stuck with him until that one day.
You grew up and the stuffed animal just laid next to you.
Was no longer interested in cuddling.
Protested in the streets, for the world, all the shells.
The Willow Project introduced by the US President.
Will it end the strike for climate change for the Protestants?
The earth will no longer be able to be stopped.
Maybe the earth isn't such a precious stone anymore.

And please be honest. Is this really good?

oijackio · Answer

I have to say that I only find couples a bit boring, regardless of the content. I don't like this, but it's your opinion you're allowed to say.

hifibub0207 · Answer

No matter how dense you are, Goethe was a poet.

avelichtt · Answer

There's nothing deeper behind it, so I don't like the poems so well.

killer6734 · Answer

Applause 👏 would you also remain positive instead of negative in your poem you will become a real poet writer. Still respect for you 😉👌

neinxdochxoh · Answer

No, unfortunately not. You can kind of stick words together. The thoughts are too little original, too little real, it sounds like the sound from the media. WHERE ARE YOU?

andrastor · Answer

I'll be honest: No, it's not.

These are poems, yes, but only in the sense of "similar lines". But a poem is much more than sentences, or rows that rhyme. It's music. Melody of language, rhythm of words and a dancing game with expressions, sentences and metaphors. And ideally with correspondingly significant or funny content.

Do not misunderstand how to write such poems within a short time is a good foundation, but one realizes that they have been written quickly and that there is still potential for improvement.

You sometimes use unrefined rhymes which have a very disturbing effect, as in the first two verses of the first poem. "People" doesn't remnose, except you speak the latter "breathing" which I don't hope.

"People" is hard to explain, so why use it as a rhyme? How about "people"? There are many more and much more beautiful options for this. The third and fourth verses are the same.

And you show that you still lack the sense of the rhythm of the language.

Others let work for just little money.
The simple production of jeans, all over the world.

Every word is stressed differently. It sounds nice when following stressed untoned syllables. If too many stressed syllables follow each other, this sounds bumpy and unsightly in a poem.

"Jeans, about the ga" are almost only stressed syllables. It doesn't feel nice to speak or listen.

And the number of syllables in the verses is also different. 13 I counted syllables in the first and 14 in the second of the cited verses. Because of the differences in the number of syllables, breaks and concretes, it doesn't sound like these two verses belong together.

And the contents are, with belief, typical puberty. "Great evil mankind, you should destroy it, then it will be beautiful again, all so bad, buhuuu." Superficial, lazy, uninformed, and nothing. You should also work on it.

I recommend you to inform you about various forms of poems and try to write poems in these forms. As an exercise. Look at what shapes there are, look for a shape, learn this shape and imitate that as well as you can.

One example would be Limericks:

The Woman of a Blind in Bremen
had lovers, six or ten.
He said, "Get out!
Leave my house!
I can't see you here anymore."

Or:

It was a man named Karl
that went into a steel meat grinder.
He left
this dark place
but in larger numbers.

I can only advise you to buy anthologies and read them. The Reclam publishing house has some good on offer.

Reading the works of other poets and letting you be inspired by them is a great exercise. The more so when you try to analyze their poems to find out what makes them so special.

Go on. Maybe you'll be the next Goethe or Heinz Erhardt.